Monday night – Engineering paradies

Friends,
    I need your help. My work is sponsoring a do-it-yourself video contest to help get kids more interested in engineering. Technically, I can’t enter.. since I’m one of the organizers, but i felt like it would be good for me to create something that showed folks what we were looking for. The idea is to make some short youtubable (is that a word ? ) videos that portray some aspect of engineering as appealing to a kid in middle or high school. 
   I decied ot do a parody on Coolio’s Gangsta’s Paradise.. (Wierd Al did a take of on it called Amish Paradise)   I was trying to make soemthing that was over the top goofy.. not ‘pathetic old guy trying to relate to kids’ .. Did I get there ? WHat do I need ot do to make this more fun and appealing to kids ?

Let me know what it needs.. I want this to be really fun
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Eeeek my battery’s going.. so I’ll sign off..
More tomorrow
nite all, nite Sam
-me

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y0DxmthvkKU